Lesieli's first posting of the narrative.
Walking around in the cold freezing ice, he thought it be a good ideal to put his glasses on, placing his google glass on his head, he flicked his hand at the button, to record all of the things he was doing!
Looking at the seals and the penguins made him feel like swimming. But at that time he knew he was alone! “HELLO” he yelled “HELLO”, with no one replying he knew he would be there for a long time!
As the day went by, there was still no one coming for him “HELP I’m starving” he cried out, Spreading his little blanket across the ice cold weather, he knew he wouldn't be able to survive! As he layed down to close his eyes, he heard someone calling out for him.
“Dr, Dr, Dr” the colleagues yelled, “are you ok” ? they asked, “Yes, yes I am ok” “I officially have experienced how the life is here in Antarctica” he said!
Lesieli's second posting of the narrative.
This is my edited version of my writing in Antarctica!
"We have now landed in Antarctica Dr Jake” said the FA crew. Dr Jake was so excited to explore the cold land, as they made “their way out of the plane, Dr noticed a large amount of frozen mountains. “Its pretty hard to keep warm here” he said to one of his colleagues “But it sure is a amazing piece of land” he cried out.
Glazing at the Seals eating their prey and Penguins swimming along the freezing waters, he noticed that the private plane he came in, has suddenly disappeared as well as the FA crew. “ Where have my people gone” he said to himself
Screaming and Yelling “HELP, HELP” he started getting afraid, “uhhh” “hello” “anyone out there” he gulped, ‘ROAA’ went his stomach, “I need food” he said in the dying way! Spreading his blanket across the freezing ice, he knew for sure that he was going to be there for a long time.
As the day went by, there was still no one coming for him “HELP I’m starving” he cried out. Laying down on the little blanket, he heard a helicopter. "This is my chance to save myself" he mumbled.
Grabbing, his only jacket, he waved it in the air, “HELP” he yelled out! “HELP”, Knowing the the helicopter was louder than him he still yelled for help, “HELP” he said once again, but with just a blink of his eye the helicopter was gone.
So he sat back down and gazed at his toes, “Look at my toe” “it getting purple” he said, Once again Dr layed back down and closed his eyes. Then, suddenly he heard a voice “Dr, Dr” it yelled, “could it be” he said “is it Roger, Roger my colleague”
“Yes, Yes” “Its me Roger” the voice said, as soon as he heard the word Roger, he got right up, looking around, he noticed Roger, “ROGGGGEEEER” he yelled. But while he was calling out for him he noticed a plane, “Hey that’s the Plane I came in” he mumbled.
As Roger tured back, he ran to doctor and told him that they have been waiting for him in the plane “huuu” “So your saying that the plane was there all along”? “Yes doctor” said Roger!
Hey there Lesieli,
ReplyDeleteI loved how you put in your writing before AND after. It really shows that you thought long and hard about interesting vocab, different sentence beginnings and more. Great Job! You are really improving in your writing! Keep it up!
Gloria