DALINGLING! “Yes the bell has rung” I said quietly to myself. Bursting off with excitement getting ready to go to our rugby training. I rushed to the toilets and immediately got changed before I was late.
Walking with my friends towards the field we saw Miss Vaafusuaga setting up the cones. First we did some warm ups and we played a game called survivor tag. Then we practiced our plan that we created yesterday and we did some cuts and draw and pass.
After we finished our game I was so relieved that we were finished. When I got changed I said to myself “what a good training” screaming out loud. Walking really slowly back to class I took a sip of water so I didn’t get dehydrated. I bet training is better than playing on the playground I said quietly to myself. This is the BEST day ever!!!
The best piece of writing from you so far this year Meleane. Fantastic effort from you. You used a variety of sentence beginnings. You have different sentence types (speech and statement). You have used interesting topic words that express you story well.
ReplyDeleteGreat work Meleane.
Hi Meleane I love your piece of writing, its awesome.
ReplyDeleteI think I spotted some mistakes in your work.
You can really work on that. Besides I think this is you best piece of writing I've read.
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ReplyDeletethat is some good piece of writing you have there. You even have a better sentence than me. Keep up the good work.
Thanks for commenting on my blog I'm sure you could right better that I have done.
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